For this exercise, I chose to use the color orange for transitions, yellow for pointing terms, green for key terms and blue for repetition. Some patterns that I saw was that I repeated the words, “art”, “science”, and “art and science” many times. I think that overusing these phrases weaken my essay, and that I should try to use different words instead or get rid of them altogether. I believe I relied on this device heavily, and that I could increase my transitions and key terms instead to strengthen my essay. I noticed that I did not have many transition phrases, and that if I included more than it would allow my essay to flow more smoothly. Adding more transition phrases will allow for these passages to be easier to read and follow.
Good work. 3/3