With my chosen Significant Writing Project, I demonstrated the ability to cite sources using MLA guidelines. I used the Little Seagull Handbook as a resource in order to do so. One example within my paper is:
“Kaphar explains his argument further by stating, “By and large, the representation of black people and the history of Western painting is enslaved, in servitude or impoverished…They’re hidden. They are in the shadows, and so what we have are these representations of black people that don’t reflect their humanity.” (4:12).”
With this example, I demonstrated the correct way to use in text MLA citations. Since this was an online video of a TED talk, I put the time where the quote was used in parentheses. I was able to cite all the sources that I used correctly and placed them at the end under “Works Cited”.
I was also able to address local revisions as well, which relates to sentence-level error. A few examples include grammar, punctuation and spelling.
Before:
“However, Titus Kaphar, a painter and sculptor, brings to the table an interesting point with the value of art history, which allows one to think about the value of art in a different way. Kaphar and Southan both have similar views and opinions on art which revolve around its positive impact on society. Art being used as historical and emotional value is a relevant topic that both artists would agree are important. I believe that art does find a place for itself in our world by touching the hearts of those who find the beauty in it, and those who find the importance of the culture within.”
After:
“However, Titus Kaphar, a painter and sculptor, brings to the table an interesting point with the value of art history, which allows one to think about its value in a different way. Kaphar and Southan both have similar views and opinions which revolve around its positive impact on society. Art being used as historical and emotional value is a relevant topic that both artists would agree are important. I believe that art does find a place for itself in our world by touching the hearts of those who find the beauty in it, and those who find the importance of the culture within.”
With local revisions, I didn’t really struggle with spelling or punctuation. However, the main thing I came across was that I had trouble with repetition. I would tend to repeat the same word over and over again, which made my writing sound repetitive and hard to read. I began to notice this more throughout peer review, since my peers would bring it to my attention. In this case, I used the word “art” many times throughout my essay. I chose a small paragraph to use as an example and demonstrate how I changed the word “art” to either something else, or remove it altogether.
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