Blog #8

“Within the TED talk, he brings up many points about minorities and their place in our art history. He states, “By and large, the representation of black people and the history of Western painting is enslaved, in servitude or impoverished…They’re hidden. They are in the shadows. And so what we have are these representations of black people that don’t reflect their humanity.””

After reading They Say, I Say, I do not think that I introduced my quote very well. Instead of saying just “He states”, I am going to change introduce it better by saying, “Kaphar explains his argument further by stating…”. This will allow the sentence to flow more smoothly. I already use “he states” a couple times in my paper, so I think that it is a good idea to switch things up a bit by introducing the quote in a different way.

“He states, “For now, that will have to be my justification. I’m not ready to give up writing. I’m not ready to take up some high-paid job that I’d hate in order to give up writing. I’m not ready to take up some high-paid job that I’d hate in order to reduce the world’s suffering. Maybe that will change. For now, call me Net-Positive Man.” Southan believes that one should not give up on your dream or passion.”

Even though the framing of this quotation was not terrible, I think it could be improved. After the quotation, I added “In other words, Southan believes that one should not give up on your dream or passion.”

I am going to add a quote to my paper from Southan’s text which is: “Suppose you saw a child drowning in a pond: would you jump in and rescue her, even if you hadn’t pushed her in?…It would be highly controversial to say “no”-and yet most of us manage to ignore those dying of poverty…” This is a quote made by Peter Singer, and it was suggested that we write about this analogy in our essay. I think that it is a powerful quote and that it would strengthen my paper by allowing the readers to question their moral values.